Band 5.0
Do you agree or disagree. Universities should give same amount of money to their activities as they give their library?
Yes, I do feel that universities should have(?) equal budget for their libraries as well as sport activities. It is our general belief that good player can not be good student and hence we restrict our children’s sport activities at college level. Moreover academic degree has much more value than sport activities which naturally compels students to focus more on their studies that their sport interest.
Most of the universities keep sport at last number of their priority list because of which good players do not get enough facilities and equipments to improve thier skills and eventually they loose their interest universities can play substantial role in shaping this upcoming talent by providing them good trainers and equipments which is otherwise expensive to afford. Also it will attract other students towards sport and inculcate importance of physical fitness in them.
Universities should produce genius in all fields rather than only concentrating on progress of scholars. Hence, I feel that universities should allot equal money library as well as sport activities.
Modern medicine helps to live long life. Do you agree?
The modern medicine is very important for living long life. It is depend on new technology. People take very easy and quickly. Also modern medicine is very quick absorbing to human body. It is helps to back to normal for people health condition. Therefore I agree with this statement the modern medicine is help to live long life.
First of all, the modern medicine can prevent incurable diseases. Doctors can find some diseases very early. The doctors can give suitable medicines for patient. New modern equipments are helps to doctors is going to correct way. Also intelligent people in the world live long life on helps from modern medicine. That is very important in the human society because their creative things are coming with them and they can help to others long time when they are living in long life with comfortably.
Beside, old population is increasing in the country. It is badly effect in country economy and especially for third world countries. But old people are very important in human society because their experience definitely helps to living safety and planning to new project, “experience is better qualifications” However Old people are living long life; it is helps to live long life for other because we can get advice from them and they are covering our culture and society.
Moreover modern medicine is being addicted some people. So they can not live without medicine. They should take medicine when they live. Also modern medicine is very expensive. Therefore most of poor countries couldn’t take modern medicine and it has taken commercial shape also it is depending on money. In the modern medicine have not facts of human kindness. People who they have money they can take modern medicine. But indigenous medicine has well human friendly shape. It has not depended on money.
To summarize; in my personal view, modern medicine is helping live long life with comfortably. Modern technology are being supported to find unburnable diseases very early. So doctors can take correct path immediately. Therefore may I not hesitate to agreed the above mention statement.
7. Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reason to develop your essay.
It is certainly said that leaning is an ongoing process. Every person learn something new according to their age, experience knowledge and education. According to my point of view it is always better to have teacher or guide for study.
One teacher has adequate knowledge to teach their student. He knows all the possible ways to make subject easier for the students, even he teaches them in effective manner. For example, some students are weak in some subjects but a teacher always guides them according to their mental capacity. He teaches them as fun. Some people can learn better in group by discuss the topics with others. In class people can know the other’s views, even they know how we can learn effectively. Where the teacher always give easy direction to learn.
In the today’s competitive world, everybody is busy, some people think that rather to waste their time to go for classes they can learn better regarding their subject. They can attend online classes by using internet at home. They can get relevant information from internet regarding their topic.
There is no specific time, age limit to learn something new. Something new which we always learn only with the experience such as atequates, knowledge, new habits and so on.
In sum up, I would like to say that it is always better for the people to have teacher because one teacher has good knowledge, experience and education to teach others. They can take learn easy from him rather by themselves.
Comments:
*person learns something
*everyday, depending on
*A + teacher
*teachers know all possible ways (are you sure all teachers know all possible ways?)
*”always” (be careful with the use of definitive statements such as always)
*in a group by discussing
*In class, people
*they can learn their subjects better by themselves.
*the internet (there’s only one internet, use “the”)
*a + teacher
*the essay is for you to provide an opinion and to provide supporting arguments.
Do you agree or disagree. Universities should give same amount of money to their activities as they give their library?
Yes, I do feel that universities should have(?) equal budget for their libraries as well as sport activities. It is our general belief that good player can not be good student and hence we restrict our children’s sport activities at college level. Moreover academic degree has much more value than sport activities which naturally compels students to focus more on their studies that their sport interest.
Most of the universities keep sport at last number of their priority list because of which good players do not get enough facilities and equipments to improve thier skills and eventually they loose their interest universities can play substantial role in shaping this upcoming talent by providing them good trainers and equipments which is otherwise expensive to afford. Also it will attract other students towards sport and inculcate importance of physical fitness in them.
Universities should produce genius in all fields rather than only concentrating on progress of scholars. Hence, I feel that universities should allot equal money library as well as sport activities.
Comments:
*should have AN EQUAL BUDGET to their libraries AND sport activities
*that A good player can not be A good student
*moreover, AN academic..
*at last number – AT THE BOTTOM
*because of which- THEREFORE
*loose – LOSE
*equipment is an uncountable noun therefore use singular.
- Your essay is too short, the introduction is good, as is the first paragraph but you must offer more arguments regarding why you agree or disagree. There are many spelling, punctuation and article errors. The essay is easy to follow but has the appearance of the writer running short of time .
*should have AN EQUAL BUDGET to their libraries AND sport activities
*that A good player can not be A good student
*moreover, AN academic..
*at last number – AT THE BOTTOM
*because of which- THEREFORE
*loose – LOSE
*equipment is an uncountable noun therefore use singular.
- Your essay is too short, the introduction is good, as is the first paragraph but you must offer more arguments regarding why you agree or disagree. There are many spelling, punctuation and article errors. The essay is easy to follow but has the appearance of the writer running short of time .
Modern medicine helps to live long life. Do you agree?
The modern medicine is very important for living long life. It is depend on new technology. People take very easy and quickly. Also modern medicine is very quick absorbing to human body. It is helps to back to normal for people health condition. Therefore I agree with this statement the modern medicine is help to live long life.
First of all, the modern medicine can prevent incurable diseases. Doctors can find some diseases very early. The doctors can give suitable medicines for patient. New modern equipments are helps to doctors is going to correct way. Also intelligent people in the world live long life on helps from modern medicine. That is very important in the human society because their creative things are coming with them and they can help to others long time when they are living in long life with comfortably.
Beside, old population is increasing in the country. It is badly effect in country economy and especially for third world countries. But old people are very important in human society because their experience definitely helps to living safety and planning to new project, “experience is better qualifications” However Old people are living long life; it is helps to live long life for other because we can get advice from them and they are covering our culture and society.
Moreover modern medicine is being addicted some people. So they can not live without medicine. They should take medicine when they live. Also modern medicine is very expensive. Therefore most of poor countries couldn’t take modern medicine and it has taken commercial shape also it is depending on money. In the modern medicine have not facts of human kindness. People who they have money they can take modern medicine. But indigenous medicine has well human friendly shape. It has not depended on money.
To summarize; in my personal view, modern medicine is helping live long life with comfortably. Modern technology are being supported to find unburnable diseases very early. So doctors can take correct path immediately. Therefore may I not hesitate to agreed the above mention statement.
Comments:
*your essay has confusing sentences, where your meaning is unclear.
*you mixed advantages and disadvantages of modern in one paragraph when you should divide them
*if you agree with the statement, you should have 2 paragraphs supporting your opinion, and one supporting the opposite. In your essay, it is 2 against 1.
*your essay has confusing sentences, where your meaning is unclear.
*you mixed advantages and disadvantages of modern in one paragraph when you should divide them
*if you agree with the statement, you should have 2 paragraphs supporting your opinion, and one supporting the opposite. In your essay, it is 2 against 1.
7. Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reason to develop your essay.
It is certainly said that leaning is an ongoing process. Every person learn something new according to their age, experience knowledge and education. According to my point of view it is always better to have teacher or guide for study.
One teacher has adequate knowledge to teach their student. He knows all the possible ways to make subject easier for the students, even he teaches them in effective manner. For example, some students are weak in some subjects but a teacher always guides them according to their mental capacity. He teaches them as fun. Some people can learn better in group by discuss the topics with others. In class people can know the other’s views, even they know how we can learn effectively. Where the teacher always give easy direction to learn.
In the today’s competitive world, everybody is busy, some people think that rather to waste their time to go for classes they can learn better regarding their subject. They can attend online classes by using internet at home. They can get relevant information from internet regarding their topic.
There is no specific time, age limit to learn something new. Something new which we always learn only with the experience such as atequates, knowledge, new habits and so on.
In sum up, I would like to say that it is always better for the people to have teacher because one teacher has good knowledge, experience and education to teach others. They can take learn easy from him rather by themselves.
Comments:
*person learns something
*everyday, depending on
*A + teacher
*teachers know all possible ways (are you sure all teachers know all possible ways?)
*”always” (be careful with the use of definitive statements such as always)
*in a group by discussing
*In class, people
*they can learn their subjects better by themselves.
*the internet (there’s only one internet, use “the”)
*a + teacher
*the essay is for you to provide an opinion and to provide supporting arguments.
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